Zara – A Name Among The Stars – SciFi Adv/Rom – Episode 13

Hmm. Didn’t quite make it to the expected cliffhanger … again.

I lost some of the afternoon with an emergency dental appointment for a cracked tooth, and I’m sitting here with my jaw still numb. The next chapter (the one with the cliffhanger that should have ended this episode) is difficult, and I don’t want to rush it.

Feedback of all kinds is welcome as ever.

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About Mark Henwick

I was born in Africa and left out in the sun too often. An early interest in philosophy and psychology was adequately exorcised by tending bars. And while trying to enroll in a class to read Science Fiction full time, I ended up taking an engineering degree which splendidly qualified me to move into marketing. That in turn spawned a late onset career in creative writing. When not working, I get high by the slightly less conventional means of a small light aircraft. My first book, 'Sleight of Hand' is available on Amazon at http://amzn.to/Sa0D3n

14 responses to “Zara – A Name Among The Stars – SciFi Adv/Rom – Episode 13”

  1. azrm says :

    Wow, just wow! Man, did I hate have that last chapter end!

  2. amper5andrew says :

    “Then what were you doing in Stormhaven this afternoon?”

    Oh my! and you think you don’t have a cliff hanger.

    But but but! you can’t stop it there!!!!

  3. Michael Orton says :

    Well that counts as a cliffhanger ending to me.

    Ok, not a great one, you can do better, but it still meets the minimum criteria.

    I like the clue with the wine. It could mean many things or one thing, but not nothing.

  4. Richard says :

    There was another person on the boat with the wife. It was someone she trusted and looked to for advice regarding the political situation on the planet. She wasn’t nieve and she was sharing a special bottle of wine with them.

    A family friend or mentor, the wine was nostalgic for both of them.

    Your most trusted retainer can harbor the most jealousy, after all they may be trusted and respected but they are still just an employee. The rite motivation, such as a position of power under the new regime.

  5. Shana Pare says :

    First, I am sorry to hear about the cracked tooth. Those are never any fun.

    I didn’t leave my thoughts on last week’s chapters so here they are. I really liked the way you laid out the thought processes of a security expert. As they tumbled over each other like a pile of puppies, I wound up saying to myself, wow, I am really confused. In that moment, I realized that was probably what you had intended, to show us what exactly Zara was facing.

    Moving on to this week’s chapters, if the last sentence was not your intended cliffhanger, then it did a fine job of imitating one! Seriously, I really don’t have anything specific to critique, suggest or otherwise add my two cents worth. Enjoyed it all.

    I hope you feel better soon.

    • Mark Henwick says :

      Lol. Yes, my editor has a go at me from time to time about ‘reader immersion’. When the PoV character is confused I write to make the reader feel confused, and when she’s a little drunk (as above), I write to make the reader feel a little drunk. I do understand it can just throw readers out of the story, so I try and keep it to a minimum. 🙂

      Half the mysteries will clear up over the next few chapters…

      The tooth is fine atm, thanks. I have a temporary filling and will need to go back in to get a cap.

  6. K. S. Pollack says :

    I agree with Shana. For not writing a cliffhanger you did a great job of doing it. I can’t wait to see how you are going to solve some of the mysteries.
    My only regret is that I can’t wait to read the whole book. I feel like I did when I went to the Saturday matinee for my weekly installment of Flash Gordon. Boy, does that date me.😎
    Good luck with the tooth crown.

  7. Gail Henwick says :

    Ooooh. Maybe she will have to tell him the whole truth – and nothing but the truth. BTW, maybe a member of Hanna’s family is being held hostage and she is being forced to do something for her safe return.

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